There's a bit too much familiarity in the gameplay section. Audit comma use, for example "Some devices like keypads, gun turrets, and vending machines can be hacked." → "Some devices, like keypads, gun turrets, and vending machines, can be hacked." Either throw them out properly or don't be dependent on them. The design for the new game was heavily influenced by System Shock, as the development team wanted to create a similar game." Prose would need massaging to meet FA standards one of the recurring issues I see is repetitious wording, for example: "Development began in 1997 when Looking Glass Studios approached upstart Irrational Games with an idea to co-develop a new game. A script has been used to generate a semi- automated review of the article for issues relating to grammar and house style it can be found on the automated peer review page for February 2009. But is it good enough? Thanks for taking time to look it over, Noj r ( talk) 06:58, 2 February 2009 (UTC) Reply 
I've recently copy-edited the article, and I can honestly say its the best its ever looked.
I'm really serious about getting this article up to FA quality, so I could use some FA quality criticism. This peer review discussion has been closed.
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